how correct is it fashion-wise? and what about the language it’s written in? did you like it, or hate it? please tell me what you think…thank you very much:)

Indulge your Passion for Fall Fashion

“Style is not superficial!
You deserve to take the way you look seriously.
I’ve made dressing and intellectual game.”
InStyle 2008, Anne Hathaway

If fashion is your passion, obsession and many other “ssion”s I can’t think of right now then this article is for you. Fall is like a runway paradise, a season where one can find everything and anything, but what’s so absolutely amazing about this year is the variety of styles it merges. Bold and busy patterns (whether it’s African and Indian inspired fabrics or the classic British plaids), combined with Boho chic (relaxed 70’s hippie style) paired with 80’s style pointy toe shoes ( and yes they’re back in forms of trendy booties and stiletto heels) and countless other trends such as bold accessories (including ethnic cuff bracelets, African pearl jewellery, statement necklaces, wide belts) bags of all sorts (for the everyday look opt for big leather bags, or fringed purses, for formal occasions eccentric and eye-catching clutches are favored). Also seen on the runway was the tuxedo inspired look and Chanel-like glamour. It is hard to pick the ultimate colors of this season because of the diversity of styles as mentioned. The ethnic patterns are mainly in fiery shades of reds, oranges and yellows. Boho chic claims cooler colors such as blues, purples and neutral browns. Even more diverse does it get with the comeback of the 80s, bringing back neons and colors like fuscia, and to top this all off Chanel comes in play with its timeless black, white and creamy tones. Fall ’08 is all about experimenting, pairing rough and raw with glam and timeless; let your eccentric and laid-back hippie come out, and remember don’t get too psyched about one particular trend because “like a bus or a boyfriend there’s always another one coming”-Elle 2008

The article is certainly informative so high marks for content.

You need to come to grips with sentence and paragraph structure. This is a bit of a mess.

Good phrasing, sentence and paragraph organisation would make this a much more interesting read. One good tip is to read your article aloud as if you were addressing an audience. Note where you have to breathe – that’s the end of a sentence. Then, every time you change the subject – that’s where you need a new paragraph. Don’t forget, the paragraph change gives the reader a chance to absorb the information you have already given. Your single monster paragraph makes the reader feel like they are trying to memorise an encyclopedia.

Try to organise your facts in a slightly more logical sequence starting with the most important. Your organisation is not bad, it just needs a little improvement.

I do like your ending – always leave them smiling! Very good indeed!

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